The Finest China Writing Since ‘River Town’

Grant doesn’t think too highly of Jarrett’s literary efforts…


The man who hit Jarrett in the head with a broom spoke in a boiled accent.

Jarrett Drakes rubbed his eyes and leaned up. He’d fallen asleep on the 587 bus and he’d laid all night on his right arm, now tingling, Jarrett shuddering awake to the man’s orders in Wuhanese, the man tapping his head with the broom’s bristles.

Jarrett pushed the broom away. He peeled crusted puke off his lips.

The man wore an orange vest and two women in the same-colored vests stood at the front of the bus, staring at Jarrett and whispering to each other.

Jī diǎn le?” Jarrett asked, tapping his left wrist, where as of last night he’d worn a watch.

The man swiped his broom at Jarrett.

Jī diǎn le?” Jarrett repeated.

The man brushed at Jarrett again, one of the bristles nicking Jarrett’s cheek.

“Ow. Fuck.” Jarrett scrambled to his feet, the world listing to the left, Jarrett to the right. He steadied himself on a bus seat with both hands, clutching it like a walking stick.

The man continued haranguing Jarrett in Wuhanese, jabbing a finger at the crusted puke on the bus floor.

“Sorry,” Jarrett whispered. He squeezed the bridge of his nose. “Fuck, I just — ” He closed his mouth against further words as the biting aftertaste of baijiu crept up his throat. He’d left the party promising himself he wouldn’t puke, not this time. He let out a grunt and opened his eyes. “Jī diǎn le?

The man started yelling at him.

“Alright, alright.” Jarrett slipped past the man and his broom and the women up front paused their conversation, resuming it when Jarrett stepped off the bus.

He was in a bus depot on the western edge of Wuchang, across the river from Hanyang and somewhere out there Hankou, the three districts comprising Wuhan, China, summer 2006. Nearly three years here and he still had trouble with Wuhan’s seasons, too hot or too cold, and the respiratory infection so common it was now a companion.

Jarrett trembled. His mouth was dry. He found a restroom on the other side of the depot, a squat toilet and a cobwebbed sink. He cupped sinkwater in his hands and splashed it in his mouth, swallowing and grimacing in a stained mirror. He looked none the worse for the wear and outside he found drivers squatting flatfooted around a card game, cigarettes in their mouths.

Jī diǎn le?

One of the drivers showed Jarrett his phone, and the numbers sobered Jarrett up.

“Fuck.”

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The taxi dropped Jarrett off at the mouth of Luo Jia Shan Lu, the street terminating at Wuhan University’s main gate. Jarrett paid in cash. A dashboard fan spun from driver to passenger and Jarrett basked in its cool air for a few extra moments before getting out of the cab.

The shops and businesses lining the street were mostly new. David told him the day would come when all of Wuhan would be unrecognizable and when that day came it was well past time to leave, but Jarrett thought he still had a lot of years remaining. China would host the Olympics in two years. The economy was growing. A developing country on the fast track to developed, and Jarrett was happy he was here to witness it.

Show Coffee glowed neon yellow above the streetside windows. Construction barred the way and a telephone pole lay tipped on its side, powerlines coiled in the construction dust like dead snakes. A boy reached out to touch one of the powerlines and his grandmother snatched his hand, the boy launching into a temper tantrum so brutal Jarrett thought he might be having a seizure.

“I swear I’ll never have fuckin children,” Jarrett whispered and made his way into Show Coffee, where two hostesses Western business attire welcomed him. Jarrett ignored their questions about his seating preferences, turning his head and scanning the restaurant.

Seated by the window was the editor for Willow Press, a boutique publisher based right here in Wuhan. Their catalogue consisted of travel diaries from the eighties and republished stories from the early twentieth century, tales from the period prior to the Japanese invasion, a now romantic age of opium dens and well-stocked brothels.

“Here we go,” he whispered, patting his lips for any puke. He caught the editor’s eyes halfway across the restaurant and smiled, dropping into the booth across from him. “Sorry I’m late. You weren’t waiting too long, were you?”

“Not too long,” said Grant. A balding man in his fifties, he wore his sunglasses propped up on his forehead.

“Yeah. Long night. Did you order yet?”

“I don’t want anything.”

“We could try their coffee. It’s Nescafe Gourmet in a Jar.”

“It’s what?”

“Nescafe Gourmet in a Jar. It’s an acquired taste, but once you acquire it, man.”

Grant didn’t even crack a smile. “I wanted to let you know that I read Morning on the Han River.

“Nice.”

Grant’s eyes held the warmth of icicles. “We cannot publish it.”

“Oh. It’s okay.”

“I’ll be blunt with you: this just isn’t good writing. When it comes to writing, this needs a lot of work.”

Jarrett took this without expression. Rejection was part of publishing, and he thought it best to handle rejection with grace.

“Well,” he said. “Thanks for coming out.”

“I hate giving bad news to people.”

“It’s alright. I mean, it’s a subjective business anyways. I don’t think it’s that bad, but maybe I’m biased.” Jarrett chuckled.

Again, Grant didn’t even crack a smile. “This isn’t good writing. You know what’s good writing?”

“Apparently not.”

River Town. Have you read it?”

“I haven’t even heard of it.”

Grant drew in a sharp breath. His body tensed like a man in a car about to crash. His lips slid back and forth. “You haven’t heard of River Town. Read it. I don’t want to make certain assumptions about your experience with the literary community, but is it too much to hope that you have read Winters with My Tomb?”

“Nope.”

“The finest China writing since River Town. It properly guides readers through this unique environment. You, for instance, at the start of your story your main character goes into a restaurant — ”

“A cafe.”

Grant’s eyes flashed. “Whatever it is, he just walks in.”

“Yeah?”

“You have to properly paint a picture. The big mahogany doors. For God’s sake, we don’t even know what your main character looks like. You — ”

As Grant laid into Jarrett’s writing, Jarrett sat there. He took it. Over a year of work, seventy thousand words, and it all amounted to this.

Grant fanned himself, chuckling. “I must remind myself not to make assumptions about one’s experience with writing groups.”

It all amounted to this.


Wuhan, China. Summer 2006: Jarrett Drakes teaches English at Wuhan University, caught between his desire to become a writer and the expectation that he return to America and go to business school.

When his best friend, Molly, unexpectedly leaves China after three years, Jarrett is adrift in the expat world of debauchery as he struggles to gain acceptance in a literary scene increasingly dominated by rich white kids and passive aggressive housewives.

this is so great!

Walter and Blake are two writers having a conversation at a cafe.

Walter: How’s your book doing?

Blake: Good. It’s got some reviews. And Sarah, she’s been really supportive.

Walter: She has?

Blake: Yeah. A five star review, promoting Lost Millennial Hope on her Instagram. She really likes my book, I just never expected this.

Walter: Sarah didn’t read a single word of your book.

Blake: What?

Walter: She didn’t read it.

Blake: But…but why do you say that? I mean, she gave it a five star review. She said, ‘This is so great!’ With an exclamation point.

Walter rubs his face.

Walter: Okay, you’re new to this, so let me break it down for you: Sarah did not read a single fucking word of your book. She glanced at the blurb, and maybe, maybe skimmed the first couple pages. Then she made up some ‘nice’ things to say, slathered it all in bullshit and created her review.

Blake: That’s just…

Walter: She has deemed you useful. She thinks you can be of use to her. Plus, you’re a male writer.

Blake: What does that have to do with anything?

Walter: She’s a housewife who only supports other women writers. Or did. Come to think of it, I can’t recall a single male writer she’s ever supported. So in your case, you ought to be extra-suspicious of her motives.

Blake: I just…I don’t think so.

Walter: Let me ask you something. Are you going to review her book?

Blake: Yeah.

Walter: Are you actually going to read it?

Blake: Of course.

Walter: Why? If you’re going to review someone’s book, why in the hell would you waste time reading it?


 

The Cradle (new spec fiction)

We have a rule: once a kid reaches the age of ten, we
don’t use them to spread the fire anymore.

I took my son to the cradle the day after his ninth
birthday. Nine is a good age for this. When kids are little, they
have no comprehension of how the world works, relying on
you for guidance. They trust you. Tell them they’ll be okay,
and they’ll believe it. The youngest one we’ve ever used was
four, a boy, and he gave me a thumbs-up right before he ran
towards the fascists’ checkpoint. A thumbs-up and a trusting
smile. I’ll never forget it.

Read more in the Summer 2022 issue of The Colored Lens: https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0B5MCV7T5

Humbled again to be included with such fine writers. Support small pubs like The Colored Lens, and if you really want to show your support, pick up the Autumn 2015 issue where they published another short story of mine, A Long Fall.

Unwelcome, by Quincy Carroll

Bottom Line Upfront: A smart book by a talented author. Well worth your time.


Middle Kingdom Life was a gold mine of information for people wanting to go live in China–particularly that niche of personality that teaches English as a Second Language, a gig requiring little more than the ability to speak English natively (and a white face, depending on your school). MKL covered every aspect of expat life imaginable, and in their section on Chinese women, the authors advised that the Chinese women who could speak English well were not representative of Chinese women as a whole, a not-so-subtle way of warning us to watch out for visa hunters and the women unwanted (perhaps for valid reasons) by Chinese men as they approach their third decade of life.

The reverse is also true: the people from the West who find themselves in China, teaching English with literary pretensions or teaching English while nurturing their nicotine and alcohol addictions (often hand-in-hand with literary pretensions) are not representative of your average person in the Westerner. It takes a particular type to go to China in the first place; a peculiar type to stay and yearn to go back.

So then, what kind of person does this? Who would walk away from their life and their family to go teach English in China for less than the minimum wage back home? In America, you could live in an apartment with no insulation and no central heat and air, you could use only public transportation and eat street food.

Would you Instagram it?

Would you tweet about your exotic American adventure?

For so long you had simply drifted through life with your head down but now you were constantly on display and although you hadn’t thought that you would like it, you did. You were talented in China. You had never been that good at anything, really, back home.

Unwelcome by Quincy Carroll captures the life of many young American men. It’s a smart book. Our main character is Cole, an unwanted guest in his brother Abraham’s apartment and (we’ll come to find out) not much wanted anywhere else. In China, Cole felt special, and he has something else going for him too: he’s biracial, a Chinese father, American mother.

There’s insinuations throughout the book that his father is partly responsible for Cole’s current malaise: lack of a strong masculine role model led to a lack of confidence, and lack of confidence leads to overcompensation. Cole himself isn’t a very active character, and when he does take action, he goes overboard.

Quincy Carroll does a great job letting us see all this without telling us. Cole is half-Chinese and we understand this from reading…but there is no direct mention of his hapa status until page 146. We don’t get a description of his physical appearance until his Tinder date, but by then we know. A lesser writer would have told us in the first few pages—indeed, if Quincy took this to any of the literary agents or writing groups I’ve participated in during the past few years, not only would they have admonished him for not describing Cole’s appearance on page 1, they likely would’ve suggested that Quincy have Cole look into a mirror, a neat narrative trick.

Unwelcome respects its readers far too much for this. Nothing is spoonfed to us, and we’re allowed to draw our own conclusions. Not only does Cole have issues in America, but in China too.

The key difference is that in China it’s easier for Cole to bullshit himself. Cole works for a beer distributor and has success. Hired for his language skills, working on his second-person POV novel in his spare time, it’s not long before Cole’s co-workers, Sam and Paul, discard him for a local, Marbury, who speaks Chinese better and understands local mores (he suggests having a hotel owner try the beer in front of them rather than relying on her promise that she will), and of course, this dismissal comes after Cole has properly trained his replacement.

The part of Unwelcome that resonated the most with me was Cole struggling to belong in the States and the memoir throughout the book, a second-person narrative where Cole embraces the truth about himself, veering away when time comes to address what happened with his girlfriend. I did live in China for a few years, and returning to the States was one of the most difficult things I ever did. Even the most loving families will struggle to understand what you’re doing and why—it’s not just friends who drift apart.

Unwelcome also deals with toxic masculinity. This is most apparent in the Vegas bachelor party for Cole’s brother (with a mound of white privilege almost as big as the coke they’re snorting) and of course, Harmony.

The way Cole and Harmony first meet is clever, and his drunken insistence on a date reflects his own cluelessness on how to treat women. I also get the impression that Harmony fetishizes Cole. Him being white was good enough, but discovering that he’s half-Chinese? You can’t miss her excitement, at least as we see it from Cole’s POV.

Which brings us to the incident. In the second-person narrative, Cole denies (a bit too specifically) that he raped her. Perhaps he did—at the bachelor party, Cole punches another guy in the face for joking about assaulting a passed-out girl. Harmony gives her take in a bilingual first-person epilogue. It’s not definitive what happened (nor should it be), and the idea that men should engage in psychological tricks to get women hearkens back to that “alpha male” bullshit that dominated the college scene in the early 2000’s. The chief proponents of those ideas have since moved on to new grifts but the underlying issues for young men remain.

All in all, Cole is unwelcome, he’s awkward, another clueless young man, product of a dysfunctional family, an apathetic society, or perhaps above all else, his own life choices.


Buy Unwelcome at Amazon or directly from the publisher.

Also check our Quincy Carroll’s first book: Up to the Mountains and Down to the Countryside

As You Were: The Military Review, Vol. 15

Service Sacrifice appears in Volume 15 of As You Were: The Military Review:

Tom stepped into the kitchen. The sun rose beyond a set of half-open blinds, harp strings of morning light on the linoleum floor. He fixed himself a coffee and raised the blinds, blinking. Fog on the window wreathed a stained-glass firetruck Kylie had made in preschool. His first deployment, when she was three, she had cried when he came home and tried to hug her.

As You Were: The Military Review features top-notch fiction, non-fiction, poetry and art from veterans, active duty and family members. Fiction includes Buick, by David Lanvert, Latrine Queen, by Nicholas Cormier III, Signature Wound by Jeffrey Loeb and Charlie’s Window by Melody Edwards.

Navy lifestyle, Army lifestyle, the military is a lifestyle, and what happens to our armed forces doesn’t just affect service members; it affects families as well. It affects us all and I encourage you to check out the great writing linked above. It’s a small sample of the military lifestyle.